Monday, August 11, 2008

Too Disturbing? (Chapter 1 First Draft)

Chapter 1

Jason came to, slowly. He barely opened his eyes, noticing their weight from last night. Trying to kill yourself really is tiring.

The lights were blinding. His arm instinctively moved to shelter his eyes with its shade. Jason caught a glimpse of the room. It was bright white, nothing but pure white. He saw a tray with tools on it, something a dentist or other doctor would have.

Jason didn’t know where he was, but it didn’t matter. His body was exhausted, but it didn’t matter. He had even failed at killing himself, or did he? He couldn’t remember, it was all just a giant haze in his memory.

Maybe he was dead, and this is what heaven was like. But then again, he wouldn’t have gone to heaven. No, not him.

“You’re awake! This early? I must report this!” he heard someone say, quickly followed by a door being opened and slammed without concern.

Jason’s eyes got used to the room, but it didn’t matter. Nothing mattered, not as long as it kept him alive. He walked over to the tray with the tools. They were definitely not tools found in a doctor’s office. Their edges were all sharpened and they glistened in the bright lights. They looked like something from a horror film in a doctor’s office, like a doctor from Hell of something like that.

Jason saw something that he recognized amongst these tools. A knife. Something simple. Something he knew very well. Something he could use.

He picked it up, and stabbed his eye...

...at least he would have, if he could pick it up. He thought he had missed the first try, maybe his aiming was off because his body was exhausted. He tried again. And again. And again. He couldn’t pick it up. He stared at his hand, only to see the tools clearly through its transparency. He was a ghost. Maybe he did kill himself.



hehe. still a first draft. nowhere near finished. just an idea for now.

2 comments:

_-*Kristen*-_ said...

thats really good. I like your new layout, but the words are kinda hard to read maybe you should try to make the text black or something like that.

its not that disturbing, its really cool. i just wonder how he got into that place. Hopefully that makes itself known later on in the story

Arielle said...

It's not disturbing, I'm just wondering why he would want to stab his eye! That would huuuuuurt!